Looking for someone to proofread and give suggestions. Thanks One more set of clothes will be hanging from the Smith's clothesline! It's a baby shower for Kerri! Please join us for Mimosa Brunch, Games, DJ, & Dancing on Saturday, April 19th from 12-4 The Golf Club at Stony Ridge In lieu of the wishing well, please bring an item to hang on little Sally's clothesline. RSVP by April 3rd Janet House: (845)-555-5555 P.S. Bringing a package of diapers will enter you in a gift basket drawing! Visit http://www.stonyridgegc.com/location.cfm for directions (not the actual website address)
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Congrats to the expectant mother! As for proofreading, it is grammatically correct. My suggestion, despite having added the website, would be to include an address and city for Stony Ridge. You say "in lieu of the wishing well", and I'm just not quite sure what that means. Where I'm from (Chicagoland), people just bring a gift to a baby shower. If it means that you are specifically asking for baby clothes...........I'm not sure if I dig it. The 'diaper raffle' as it is sometimes called is a great idea - my sister got tons of packages of diapers that lasted more than 3 months! But be aware: people will consider a package of diapers as part of their gift - which means you could end up with less of something else. Hope that makes sense. If it is your shower, have a great time! Best wishes to the mom-to-be for a great pregnancy, pain-free labor, and smooth delivery! :)
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